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์„œ์šธ Y๋Œ€ ์˜๋ฌธ๊ณผ ์ˆ˜์—…์— ์ œ์ถœํ–ˆ๋˜ arguementative essay ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค ์ฃผ์ œ๋Š” corporal punishment์ด๊ณ  ํ•™์ ์€ A๋ฐ›์•˜์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค ์™ธ๊ตญ์ธ ์ฒจ์‚ญ์„ ํ†ตํ•ด ๊ดœ์ฐฎ์€ ์ˆ˜์ค€์˜ ์—์„ธ์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ๋ง๋“ค์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
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์ฒด๋ฒŒ๊ธˆ์่ง์— ๊ด€ํ•œ agumentative essay ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
  • ๋ฏธ๋้ฉ๋ณด๊ธฐ

    ์†Œ๊ฐœ

    ์„œ์šธ Y๋Œ€ ์˜๋ฌธ๊ณผ ์ˆ˜์—…์— ์ œ์ถœํ–ˆ๋˜ arguementative essay ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
    ์ฃผ์ œ๋Š” corporal punishment์ด๊ณ 
    ํ•™์ ์€ A๋ฐ›์•˜์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค ์™ธ๊ตญ์ธ ์ฒจ์‚ญ์„ ํ†ตํ•ด ๊ดœ์ฐฎ์€ ์ˆ˜์ค€์˜ ์—์„ธ์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ๋ง๋“ค์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค

    ๋ชฉ์ฐจ

    ์—†์Œ

    ๋ณธ๋ๅฉ๋‚ด์šฉ

    Have you heard the news that Seoul Office of Education prohibited the corporal punishment in school by law? Corporal punishment, a kind of physical punishment that involves the deliberate infliction of pain for the purpose of disciplining a wrongdoer, has been a big issue in Korea society because of this decision. Some problems occur after corporal punishment being banned; for example, The teacher has been sexually harassed from students, because students know the teacher cannot inflict corporal punishment to them (Mok A8). Besides, some of them slapped their teacher on the face in a fit of anger after she was scolded (A8). However, this situation is just only small part of all aspects brought out from the prohibition of corporal punishment. Winds of positive changes are blowing in schools such as the increasing of communication. Therefore, we should prohibit the corporal punishment by law in secondary school for three reasons.

    ์ฐธ๊ณ ์ž๋ฃŒ

    ยท โ€œThe Universal Declaration of Human Rightsโ€. United Nations .1948
    ยท Mok Jung-Min. โ€œSexual harassment and Swearword to teachers, a crisis or teacherโ€.
    ยท Kyunghyang shinmun 10 Jan. 2011:A8. Print.
    ยท Ripoll and Ronald, Rohner. โ€œCorporal Punishment in Cross-Cultural
    ยท Perspective: Directions for a Research Agendaโ€. Cross-Cultural-Research
    ยท 40.1(2006) : 220-249
    ยท Robert West. โ€œ How the violence occursโ€. London Psychology Society 30.2(2005)
    ยท Schumann. โ€œLegislation and Liberalization: The Debate about Corporal Punishment
    ยท in Schools in Postwar West Germany.โ€ The German History Society 25.2 (2007) :
    ยท 1-28. Print.
    ยท Seon-young, Kim. โ€œThe Research about the corporal punishment in Middle Schoolโ€.
    ยท Yonsei University, 2007.Print.
  • ์ž๋ฃŒํ›„๊ธฐ

      Ai ๋ฆฌ๋ทฐ
      ์งฟ’์‹ํŒ๋งค์ž์˜ ์ž๋ฃŒ๋Š” ์ œ๊ฐ€ ํ•„์š”๋กœ ํ•˜๋Š” ์ง€์‹์„ ์™„๋ฒฝํ•˜๊ฒŒ ์ถฉ์กฑ์‹œ์ผœ์ฃผ์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ณผ์ œ ์ œ์ถœ์ผ์ด ์–ผ๋งˆ ๋‚จ์ง€ ์•Š์•„ ์‹œ๊ฐ„์ด ๋ถ€์กฑํ–ˆ๋Š”๋ฐ, ์ด ์ž๋ฃŒ ๋•๋ถ„์— ๊ณผ์ œ๋ฅผ ์ œ์ถœ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ •๋ง ๊ฐ์‚ฌํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค!
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        ํŒŒ์ผ์˜ค๋ฅ˜ ์ค‘๋ณต์ž๋ฃŒ ์ €์ž‘๊ถŒ ์—†์Œ ์„ค๋ช…๊ณผ ์‹ค์ œ ๋‚ด์šฉ ๋ถˆ์ผ์น˜
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